was haltet ihr davon

Ich wollt nur wissen ob ihr meinen Letter ansprechend findet, wenn ihr ihn durchlest. Verbesserungsvorschläge???

Dear Host family,
Friendly, social, communicative, active, reliable, candid, helpful and active. My friends described me with this adjectives when I asked them. I have to add that I’m also open-minded and determined and I’m stubborn and sometimes I talk too much.
Now I’ll introduce myself detailed so that you know something about me after reading this letter.
my name is NAME, my birthday is on DATE. I live in a house in a little village (??? inhabitants) in Bavaria called VILLAGE. The nearest city is CITY (10 000 inhabitants), which is 3 miles away. But although VILLAGE is so small, we have our own railroad station.
My sister and me always go to school by train because the school I go to, the NAME OF SCHOOL, is in Cham. We only need six minutes by train.
A normal daily routine looks as follows: I get up at six o’clock and while reading the newspaper I have breakfast At around half past six I go into the bath and shower and get ready. Usually I’m ready too early but this doesn’t matter because then I read or check my mails. At ten past seven my sister and me leave the house. At half past seven I’m in school, where I talk to my friends or learn until the classes starts at eight o’clock. At one o’clock school ends and I go home. We have lunch all together at half past one because my Mum is an elementary school teacher and my Dad is houseman and sport teacher in liberal profession, so he teaches four hours at a secondary school. I have my own room where I can do my homework and at the moment we are renovating our whole house and so I will get a new room. After lunch my sister and me always have to clean the kitchen and wash the dishes. In the afternoon I meet friends, or I read or do something other. And in the evening I go either to soccer practice, or to the fitness center together with my Dad, or I go running or I read or do something else. My favourite subjects at school are Sport because I love to move, English, Physics, Biology and German. I like going to school because I meet all my friends there and the classes are very interesting in the subjects I like. I’m interested in sport, literature, music and other cultures and languages. I read a lot. My favourite books are the Harry Potter books and my favourite author is Rainer M. Schröder. Until July 2007 I was a member of the „NAME orchestra“, where I play the transverse flute. I have to give it up because we had a lot of gigs and it takes too much time. I like playing sport myself and also watching it. I’m member of the youth forum in our sport club, which means that we plan recreational activities for the children in our club during the holidays. I play a lot of sport. I play soccer in a team and I’m the team captain. Soccer is my favourite sport but I also like Basketball, Volleyball, Handball, running, inline-skating, swimming and certainly surfing. I discovered surfing during the last summer holidays, when my family and me took a round-trip with our caravan to Corsica for two weeks. I tried surfing for my first time and I couldn’t stop. I really like it. It’s the best sport I have ever done together with soccer. I have also spent a week in France, where I took part in an exchange programme with my France class. We went to Bordeaux and everybody spent one week with another family. We saw a lot of things and I really enjoyed it there even though we had a bad weather. Only three weeks later in the Easter holidays I went to Milan together with my two best friends for 5 days. I worked at an eggs factory for two weeks to pay for the trip. If travelling weren’t so expensive I would travel every holidays around the whole world especially to the sea because I like the sea, the water and the beaches.
In my free time I meet friends, play sport, read or just relax. In the summer I’m always at the outdoor-swimming pool because I like the water and I can also play beach volleyball there and meet friends.
I don’t know exactly what I want to become. Perhaps something with sport because I don’t want to sit the whole day. Marine biologist is also an interesting job but there are not a lot of workstations. Last I think about becoming development worker. My grandmother’s sister is one and her job really impressed me. I know that I want to see as much as possible from the world
I don’t attach importance to a career it’s more important for me to be happy. I want to start a family and have children.
I don’t know exactly when I discovered my enthusiasm for Australia but I think it was around four years ago when I saw some friends’ photos. They impressed me and I knew that I wanted to go to Australia - the beaches, the sea and the hot weather.
I have known for some time that I don’t want to spend my whole life in Germany. I don’t like the cold and rainy weather and there’s no sea. I’m not into the winter without skiing.
At the beginning of the exchange year, I think it will be hard. I will be confronted with a new culture and another language and I don’t know anybody. But I think after a few weeks, when I have settled in I will like being there. During the exchange I will meet a lot of new people and I hope that I will make a lot of friends. I will also learn a lot about a new culture and I will be able to try other sports. After the exchange I think I’ll be a different person than before. I think I’ll be more independent and make decisions for myself. I also learned that sometimes you have to jump over one’s own shadow.
As a positive side action I’ll learn to speak English fluently, which offers me a lot of new perspectives.
I’ll come to the end of my letter now and I think if we all arrange we will get along well and we will have a nice time together. At last I’ll thank you for hosting me. I think an exchange year is not a whole year of holidays. But I think when it is over you and me will have spent a nice year which you will always remember.

Yours sincerely

ist, wenn man sich am anfang des briefes bedankt :wink:
so nach dem motto first of all, i would like to thank you for letting me become a member of your family oder so aehnlich :wink: