Hi!
ich bin ganz neu hier und kann überhaupt nicht einschätzen ob das so gut ist!
Habe ich zu viele widerholungen drin oder so? wäre wirklich supersuper lieb wnen ihr einmal lesen würdet! Vieeeelen dank!
Dear Host Family,
at first I want to thank you for reading my letter and spending time on getting know me better.
To spend one year in the USA is my big dream. In this letter I tell you something about me, my family, everyday life, hobbies and my hopes for the year in the USA.
I live with my mother and brother in a house with a big garden in Essen (it’s in the west of Germany). I love them and our relationship is very well. If i have problems I can talk to them. We have another family member: our cat Molly. She is always hungry and wants to have food.
It is normal for me to help in the house because at home each of us has to do something.
I see myself as a very natural and affectionate person. If I have set a target I try a lot to reach it.
I laugh a lot and I am very humorous. My friends say that I am a very open, independent and flexible Person.
Currently I am in the 10. grade of a grammar school. I have good friends there and we always have a lot of fun together. School starts at 7:45 P.M. and ends normally at 1:05 or 2:00 A.M. After school I do my homework.
I spend most of my free time at the stall with my horse Winnetou. After a day full of stress I love to saddle up Winni and ride around the fields. But I also like to train in the riding hall/place and take part in championships.
Riding is not my only hobby. I really like swimming, jogging or reading, too and soon I will learn to play guitar. I am very curious to get to know your free time activities.
There are many reasons why I would like to spend one year in the USA. I am fascinated of the “American way of life ” and I hope to feel it by myself. I know it will not be the same life as I am living now, but that makes me so curious. I would like to know new people, maybe to get a new family and if I am lucky I can get some experience for my future life.
(first of all) I want to thank you for reading my letter and spending time on getting (to) know me better.
(Spending)one year in the USA is my big(gest) dream. In this letter I (will) tell you something about me, my family, (my) everyday life, (my) hobbies and my hopes for the year in the USA.
I live with my mother and brother in a house with a big garden in Essen (it’s in the west of Germany). I love them and our relationship is very (good). If i have problems I can talk to them. We have another family member: our cat Molly. She is always hungry and wants to have food.
It is normal for me to help in the house because at home each of us has (their own duty).
I see myself as a very natural and affectionate person. (Once) I have set a target I (am willing to work hard to) reach it.
I laugh a lot and I am very humorous. My friends say that I am a very open(-minded), independent and flexible Person.
Currently I am in the 10(th) grade of a grammar school. I have good friends there and we always have a lot of fun together. School starts at 7:45 (a.m.) and ends normally at 1:05 or 2:00 (p.m.) After school I (have) homework (to do).
I spend most of my free time at the (barn) with my horse Winnetou. After a day full of stress I love to saddle up Winni and ride around the fields (, b)ut I also like to train in the riding hall/place and take part in championships.
Riding is not my only hobby. I really like swimming, jogging or reading, too and soon I will learn to play (the) guitar. I am very curious to get to know your free time activities.
There are many reasons why I would like to spend one year in the USA. I am fascinated of the “American way of life ” and I hope to (experience) it myself. I know it will not be the same life as I am living now, but that makes me so curious. I would like to (get to) know new people, to (become a part of ) a new family and I can (make) experience(s) for my future life.
ich find ihn schon mal ganuz gut. meine korrekturen (in klammern) sind nur ein paar anregungen. allerdings würde ich noch ein bisschen ausführlicher beschreiben was du so machst und was du machst. beschreib was du mit deiner familie/ deinen freunden machst. was für bücher/musik/filme magst du? was genau fasziniert dich am leben in den usa? was sind deine lieblingsfächer? es gibt noch so viel was du schreiben kannst.
ich geb dir noch den link zu dem brief den ich damals geschrieben hab, vielleicht findest du noch ein paar anregungen.
viel glück! hoffe ich konnte dir ein bisschen helfen. liebe grüße. lea
Hallo!
Ich antworte mal als ATS Mutter und als Mutter eines Gastkindes: dein Brief wäre mir für eine Auswahl zu nichtssagend. Schau doch bitte nach, was Du über Dich noch berichten kannst; wie ist Dein Verhältnis zu Freunden, gehst Du oft aus, was bedeutet für Dich im Speziellen American way of life. Stelle Dir doch bitte vor, an Hand dieses Briefes soll eine Familie Dich für ein Jahr beherbergen und ihr Leben mit Dir teilen. Da sollten sie schon etwas mehr über Dich erfahren. Unbedingt gehört auch das Alter Deiner Mutter, ihr Beruf und ihre Berufstätigkeit und auch das Alter Deiner Bruders mit in den Brief.
Dieser Brief ist der wichtigste Teil Deiner Bewerbung, da wirst Du noch ein wenig Arbeit investieren müssen.