und noch ein host family letter ;) bitte um anregungen

huhu

bin grad dabei zu schreiben und würd euch ma bitten, da drüber zu lesen und heikle konstruktionen oder so ma zu verbessern, und vll anregungen geben weil is bissl wenig und ka was ich schreiben soll, würd schon noch gern ne seite füllen^^

danke im vorraus

Dear Host Family,

First of all I want to thank you reading my letter. I’m really looking forward spending a year in New Zealand. I think my motivation to spend a year abroad is learning new things about your culture and way of life, but also the opportunity to speak a new language fluently. In television I’ve seen much about your Country and I’m overwhelmed about the nature. To make the decision easier for you, I’ll now tell you something about me and my family, my school and hobbies…

My Name is M.M., I’m 15 years old. I live with my family in a village called xy in Hesse. It has got about 3500 inhabitants and it’s about 60 miles south of Frankfurt.
My family and friends say I’m an open minded, nice and responsible person. I think I’m not circuitous so I can adept myself to your family to get along swimmingly.
The family ‘M’ consists of my father, x, my mother, y, and me. My father is 46 years old and my mother 39. Both of them are xy. I think I’ve got a great family, if I’ve got problems I can call them for an advice. In my opinion it’s important to have a good relationship to my family and to my relatives because so you grow up in controlled daily routine without any grave problems. It would be marvellous to live in this way also in New Zealand.

I’m visiting the 10th grade of the ‘xy-school’in xy. It’s a secondary school. Every morning I have to go by bus to school. The way to school lasts about 45 minutes. My class has got about 30 students and the school about 1700. My favorite subjects are of course English, sports, politics and economy but also chemistry.
In my leisure time I go two times a week to soccer-practice. At most of the weekends we’ve got a match against other soccer-teams. Another hobby is dirt-biking. For riding dirt-bike we just decide impulsively when we meet to ride the bike. The dirt-park is just about 5minutes far away of my home.
My friends are really important for me. Many of them I can see in school. We’ve got much fun. My best friend is called T. Mostly we meet on weekends, because he’s visiting another school. Till last year T and I were fans of the American football team Frankfurt Galaxy but now the league, where the Galaxy played, got closed. But I’ve also seen the rugby world cup last year and I liked it. I would love to see a rugby-match in New Zealand.

danke fürs lesen und für die anregungen :wink:

los traut euch :wink:

haha, also dann bin ich mal die erste hier.
grundsätzlich gefällt mir der brief gut. nur immer wenn ich so einen brief hier lese, denke ich: was macht die person jetzt ganz speziell aus? weißt du, wenn die familie deinen brief bekommt, können sie nicht so viel damit anfangen, dass du zur schule gehst, wie alt deine eltern sind und so.-das werden sie auch schon von vielen anderen gelesen haben! aber das mit dem dirt-bike find ich zum beispiel cool :slight_smile: kleb dazu noch tolle fotos von dir und deinen freunden von drauf! das wirklich so deine atmosphäre ein bisschen rüber kommt!
schreib, was du über neuseeland im fernsehen siehst. hast du dich von anfang an dafür begeistert? ich hab zum beispiel keine ahnung von neuseeland gehabt, einfach nur, dass das irgendwo am po der welt liegt bis ich das mal auf einem infotreffen gehört habe und sofort feuer und flamme war. :wink: wie bist du auf das land gekommen? reizt dich was bestimmtes, was anders als deutschland ist? kannst du noch an was andres außer neuseeland denken? redest du die ganze zeit davon? wie siehst du aus, wenn du daran denkst? also ich meine so, kriegst du das lächeln nciht mehr aus dem gesicht, hüpfst du die wände hoch?
hehe, ich hoffe das klingt jetzt nich zuuu dämlich, aber ich hoffe, ich konnte dir ein paar anregungen geben. dein brief gefällt mir schon :grinning:

hiho

erstma danke für die tips^^ bin nichso der briefe-schreiber, aber die tips sind gut :wink: damit lässt sich bestimmt was anfangen…

mfg nico

ich musste auch so ienen breif schreiben wusste gar nciht was ich da schrieben soll … aber deiner ist echt gut :smiley:
meiner ist noch nicht ganz fertig aber ich hoffe das wird noch:

Dear host family,

First of all I want to say thank you because you give me the chance to spend a year in the USA and you give me the chance to learn the language better.

My name is Elena and I am 15 years old. I want to spend one year in the USA, because I want to learn English much better. Besides I often look these High school films. I want to know if the school there is really as in this films. I want to get to know new people and get new friends. And I want to get more self-consistent.

As you can see on the photos, I have short brown hair and brown eyes. I live in a flat near a river (it is like a very little harbour) with my parents, my older sister and our cat.
Since I am four years old I am dancing Jazz dance. I have found very good friends in my dancing group and I love dancing. Since two years I play piano. I love reading books or listening to music (rock, pop but also classical music).

From 8 o’clock to 14 o’clock I am at school. My favourite subjects are English and physical education. I think English is a language, which you can speak all over the world and everybody understands you and physical education is much better than sitting in the classroom and listening to the teacher. I like sports and I like to play in teams.
After school I normally cycle home and make my homework. After this is it different, because each day I have different thinks to do.
On Monday I have private tutoring in maths and on Tuesday I have piano lesson. On each Wednesday I go to my best girlfriend, Mara, after school and then we have Jazz dance lesson in the evening. On Thursday I have nothing to do, so I watch TV or read a book. On Friday Mara comes to me after school and then we go to set pattern dance with other friends.
On the weekends I often have sleepovers with my four best friends, Mara, Wiebke, Pia and Lisa. But sometimes I go cycling with my parents or we go to musicals or to the opera.

When I am out with my friends we often go shopping or we go to the cinema. But sometimes we just hang around at somebody’s home or we surf in the internet. My four best friends are irreplaceable and they are very important for me.

My sister’s name is Anika and she is 18 years old. Normally we do not see each other very often, because she is longer at school than me and then she goes downstairs in her room. Although we have many arguments, I love my sister and she can be very nice and friendly (if she wants to…).
My father’s name is Thomas and he is the best father I could have. We do not have many arguments. When I was ten years old we have build many little (weiß das wort nicht) together and it was much fun.
My mother’s name is Anette and she is the best mother I could have. She helps me with my homework and she learns with me for test. Sometimes we have arguments, too. But then we get along with each other.

At home I have to tidy up my room, buy something for the household and I must feet our cat, Babsi. I adore our cat, because she is so sweet and lovely. When I was six years old she strayed into our home. We searched for the owner, but nobody answers. So we kept her as our pet and she is doing well.

When I am older I want to pass my school leaving examination and then I think about going abroad as an au pair girl. But then I want to go to Australia, because my cousin will emigrate there.

hier is jetz mein fertiger brief, den ich auch wegschicken werd^^
ich hoff er gefällt euch :slight_smile:

Dear Host Family,

First of all I want to thank you reading my letter. I’m really looking forward spending a year in New Zealand. I think my motivation to spend a year abroad is learning new things about your culture and way of life, but also the opportunity to speak a new language fluently. In television I’ve seen much about your Country and I’m overwhelmed about the nature. To make the decision easier for you, I’ll now tell you something about me and my family, my school and hobbies…

My Name is Nico, I’m 15 years old. I live with my family in a village called xy in Hesse. It has got about 3500 inhabitants and it’s about 60 miles south of Frankfurt.
My family and friends say I’m an open minded, nice and responsible person. I think I’m not circuitous so I can adept myself to your family to get along swimmingly.
The family ‘m’ consists of my father, y, my mother, y, and me. My father is 46 years old and my mother 39. Both of them are xy(beruf ;)). I think I’ve got a great family, if I’ve got problems I can call them for an advice. In my opinion it’s important to have a good relationship to my family and to my relatives because so you grow up in controlled daily routine without any grave problems. It would be marvellous to live in this way also in New Zealand.

I’m visiting the 10th grade of the ‘xy-school’ in xy. It’s a secondary school. Every morning I have to go by bus to school. The way to school lasts about 45 minutes. My class has got about 30 students and the school about 1700. My favorite subjects are of course English, sports, politics and economy but also chemistry.
In my leisure time I go two times a week to soccer-practice. At most of the weekends we’ve got a match against other soccer-teams. Another of my hobbies is dirt-biking. For riding dirt-bike we just decide impulsively when we meet to ride the bike. The dirt-park is just about 5minutes far away of my home. Other hobbies as sports is meeting friends, listening to music or watching TV in the evening.
My friends are really important for me. Many of them I can see in school. We’ve got much fun. My best friend is called T. Mostly we meet on weekends, because he’s visiting another school. Till last year T and I were fans of the American football team Frankfurt Galaxy but now the league, where the Galaxy played, got closed. It was really fun watching football-matches. The atmosphere was great and all fans were cheering for their teams. But I’ve also seen the rugby world cup and I liked it. I would love to watch a rugby-match in New Zealand.

Why I decided to do an exchange in New Zealand? Well first time I’ve seen your country in ‘the lord of the rings’ and I loved it. The versatileness overwhelmed me. Then I’ve seen reportages on TV. What I like about New Zealand too is you can go swimming and skiing at the same season. On the internet I’ve seen a short video called ‘welcome to the youngest country on earth’. It shows some really great regions of your country.
One of my school friends will also do an exchange to New Zealand, so we both are talking all time about the exchange-year. We think the ten months will be one of the greatest in our life. I can hardly wait coming to know you and New Zealand.
In books many people say they’ve seen many regions of the world but no country is so great as New Zealand, the most beautiful end of the world even. I think before and after the exchange I agree with them.

All in all I’m really excited to experience the New Zealand’s way of life, next year I’m able to do this on myself. I hope you handle me not as a ‘paying guest’ I hope you handle me as a real family member.

I hope you enjoyed reading my letter and helped you to make your decision easier.
I’m really looking forward getting to know you and I think, it can be reality next year.

Yours, Nico

:slight_smile:

:wink:

also dein brief ist echt schön, nicht so langatmig und trotzdem alles drin.
und was die formulierungen angeht, es geht ja mehr um die person und alles und nicht das ihr perfektes englisch könnt. das mit dem sprechen klappt drüben sowieso acuh erst mal nicht, wenn ihr nicht jedes wort nachschlagen könnt, also der fam mal keine falschen hoffnungen mache^^
nee aber eure briefe sind alle so gut…meiner war viel ungenauer und acuh nicht über meine schule und so was…ich hab angst das mich jetzt keiner will :frowning:

huhu
danke erstma fürs lesen^^ was das mit den formulierungen angeht, ich find es einfach schöner, einen text flüssig lesen zu können. das kommt einfach besser an, als wenn etwas nur stockend zu lesen ist :slight_smile:

kannst ja deinen brief auchma reinstelln, dann les ich auch ma drüber^^