ICX host family letter- irgendwelche felher, ergänzungen oder verbesserungsvorschläge?

Dear host family,

I’m really happy that I will get the chance to spend a half year in America. Since two years I hope that I will go to America and now this dream comes true. I’m so grateful.
In this letter I want to tell you something about myself, my family and my daily life.

My name is Jennifer Hoffmann and I’m 15 years old, but only after a few days in America I will become 16 years. Since three years I live in a village, which is called Windheim. Windheim is in the north of the federal state North Rhine-Westphalia. Our hometown has round about 1500 inhabitants. The first twelve years of my life I lived with my parents in Rosenhagen. This is a very small village with only round about 300 inhabitants. I have got no brother or sister, but in the USA I want to know how it is to live in a family with other children. Three years ago my parents got divorced and I moved with my mother to Windheim. It was alright for me because Rosenhagen is only five kilometers off our new hometown and for that reason I can see my father whenever I want. On the whole I like the life in a village because I grew up with much nature around myself. Nevertheless I want to know the daily life in a small town or even a bigger town. Therefore I hope that you live in a town, therewith I have the change to become acquainted with the life in a town. My family is evangelical, but we don’t go to church very often.

I’m a student in the 10th grade and visit the Gymnasium Petershagen. I really like to go to school because I can see my friends and most of our lessons are strict and with much fun at the same time. I’ve started learning English in the 5th grade and Latin in the 7th grade. I think now my English is good enough to do the exchange in the USA. Most time I speak English fluently, of course with some mistakes, but certainly it will get better, when I’m a few weeks in America. There I want to improve my English.
My favorite subjects are art and German because I like drawing and being creative.
Usually my school is over at 13.30, but Mondays I have nine lessons because of homework done under supervision at my school. There I supervise and help younger students from the 5th to 7th grade at doing their homework. I enjoy that very much. After finishing school I would like to go to university, but I don’t know which subject to study at the moment.

When the school is over, I meet my friends or do sport. I like to spend my free time with my friends because we always have got a lot of fun. Then we talk a lot, do sport together or go to the cinema. Thursdays I play Volleyball at SV Frille-Wietersheim with my friend Laura. I’m there since March because previously I’ve done taekwondo at ASC Pollhagen-Nordsehl. I’ve done combat sport for nearly nine years and I have got the brown belt. I’ve stopped doing this because I wanted to try something new after so many years. Laura told me about the club, where she plays volleyball and I thought it could be interesting. So I tried it and noticed that it is the right sport and now I’m there since nearly nine months. If I don’t do any of these things in my free time, I spend my daily life with my mother or my father.

In September of this year I participated in a one-week exchange to England. Many students of my parallel classes did it, too. It was interesting to get first impressions to live in a host family and we’ve seen many famous sights of England, for example the Big Ben, the Buckingham Palace or Stonehenge. I love to be in another country and to become acquainted with the differences of another culture. Every summer my mother or my father and I have vacation in another country. For example we’ve been to Scotland, Thailand, Turkey, Egypt and Cuba. In addition my father and I go skiing and snowboarding every winter. I’ve started skiing at the age of five and when I was twelve I’ve started snowboarding. I preferred the snowboard and since that time I’ve never stood at skis again. I don’t know if I still be able to do skiing now.

I think that I’m open-minded, adaptable and responsible. Sometimes I’m a little bit shy, when I meet unknowing people, but after a little while it isn’t like that anymore.

I want to know more about your daily life and your culture because I’m very interested in your county. When I’m in the USA, I want to become more self-confident and try new things. Furthermore I’m looking forward to making many experiences for my life and meeting new people. Nevertheless I’m a little bit nervous when I think about a half year in a strange country and I hope most things will go well. But all in all I’m so happy to go there and the fact that I will shift for myself energizes me to do the exchange.

I hope we will learn many things from each other. I’m looking forward to get to know you,

Yours sincerely,
Jennifer Hoffmann

→ was meint ihr dazu? ist das zu kurz oder zu lang? habe ich irgendwas vergessen?
:grinning:

Hey,

Dein Text allgemein gefällt mir ganz gut, allerdings kann man noch einiges verbessern. Ich bin in USA (Florida) aufgewachsen, daher kann ich ziemlich gut Englisch.
Ich würde es an vielen Stellen anders formulieren, da sind einige grammatikalische Fehler drin und untypische Satzstellungen, (z.B. statt „combat sport“ würde man „martial arts“ sagen) du hast viel mit Lexikon gearbeitet soweit ich das richtig sehe :wink: Teilweise hast du auch zu ausführlich erzählt (wie viele einwohner genau, welcher verein etc. ist egal) also habe ich in meiner version einiges rausgekürzt.
Ich hab dir das ganze jetzt einfach mal umformuliert.
Deinen Text allgemein finde ich recht gut! :slight_smile:

Ich würde so anfangen:

Hi,
my name is Jennifer Hoffmann and I’m 15 years old.
I’m very exited about spending half a year in America and I’m really happy that my dream will come true.

In this letter I’m going to tell you something about myself, my family and daily life here in Germany.

At the moment, I’m 15 years old, but I’ll turn 16 a few days after my arrival in America. I’ve been living in a village called Windheim for 3 years now, it has about 1500 inhabitants. Before, I’ve lived in Rosenhagen, a very small town. I don’t have any brothers or sisters, but in the USA I’d love to experience living with a big family. Three years ago my parents got divorced and I moved to Windheim with my mother. It was alright for me because Rosenhagen is only five kilometers away from our new hometown and so I’ve got the possibility to see my father whenever I want to. I like life in the village and have always enjoyed living in the nature. Nevertheless I would also like the experience of a town. Therefore I hope that I can spend my exchange-year in a city, so I can get used to living in a town. My family is evangelical, but we don’t go to church very often, so it doesn’t bother me, if you don’t have the same religion.

I’m a student in 10th grade and visit the Gymnasium Petershagen. I really like to go to school because I can meet up with my friends and have fun at the same time. I’ve started learning English in 5th grade and Latin in 7th grade. I’m confident, that my English is good enough to go on exchange in the USA. Most time I speak fluently, of course with some mistakes, but certainly it’ll get better as soon as I’ve spent a few weeks in America.
My favorite subjects are art and German because I like drawing and being creative.
Usually school ends at 13.30 here in Germany, but on Monday it takes longer, because you do your homework at school and older students or teachers help you. I also help younger students from 5th to 7th grade. I enjoy that very much. After finishing school I would like to go to university, but I’m not sure what I want to study.

When school is over, I meet my friends or do sports. I like to spend my free time with my friends because we always have a lot of fun. We talk a lot, do sports together or go to the cinema. Thursdays I play Volleyball with my friend Laura. I’ve been playing Volleyball since March, before I started to do that, I’ve done taekwondo. I’ve done martial arts for nearly nine years and I’m really good at it. I’ve stopped doing it because I wanted to try something new after so many years. Laura told me about volleyball and I thought it could be interesting. So I tried it and discovered that it is the right sport for me and now I’ve been playing since nearly nine months. If I’m not doing sports or spending time with my friends, I spend free time with my mother or my father.

September this year I participated in a one-week exchange to England. It was interesting to get first impressions of life in a host family and we’ve seen many great sights of England, for example the Big Ben, the Buckingham Palace or Stonehenge. I love beeing in another country and seeing differences of another culture. In summer my mother or my father and I always go on vacation to visit another country. For example we’ve been to Scotland, Thailand, Turkey, Egypt and Cuba. Aside from that, my father and I go skiing and snowboarding every winter. I’ve started skiing at the age of five and when I was twelve I started snowboarding. I preferred snowboarding and I haven’t been skiing since I’d gotten to know snowboarding. I’m not sure if I’m still able to ski now.

I’m a very open-minded, flexible and responsible girl. Sometimes I’m a little bit shy, when I meet people I don’t know, but as soon as I get to know the people, the shyness disappears very quickly.

I want to experience my exchange-year in America, because I’d love to get to know more about american daily life and culture, as I am very interested in your country. During my stay in the USA, I want to become more self-confident and try new things. I’m also looking forward to making many interesting experiences and meeting new people. Even though I’m very excited about spending half a year in the USA, I’m kind of nervous when I think about spending such a long time in a different country, but I’m sure everything will turn out great.

I’m looking forward to get to know you so much,

Yours sincerely,
Jennifer Hoffmann

Ich hoffe ich konnte dir helfen.
lg, Jessy :grinning: