Hostfamily letter - ist er so gut?!?!

Nach ca.4 stunden habe ich ihn endlich fertig: den Hostfamily letter.
natürlich habe ich noch meinen namen usw. daruf geschrieben, aber dasss muss ja nicht jeder wissen^^ danke schon im vorraus an die eifrigen leser und leserinnen!

Dear Host Family,

How would you begin a letter for people you don’t even know? First off all I want to thank you for just thinking about being a host family for me. It’s nice from you to give me the chance to spend one year abroad. To show you that I am the right exchange student for you, I will write here something about me and my life.

My name is Philipp Winter. I’m a 15-year-old-boy but when I come to you I’ll be 16.I live in Germany, in a town called Minden where I also was born. In Minden live about 85.000 people.
I think this year would be a wonderful opportunity for me. I want to become more self-confident and independent. I would improve my English and it will be easier for me to apply for a job.
I live with my parents in a house with a beautiful garden and a nice view. I have 2 sisters, which are much older than me. My “Little”-sister, Kathrin, is 27 years old and lives in Switzerland. She is a funny and sporty person, but also a good listener. After she finished school, she went as an Au-pair to the USA for 1 year. Since then I also want to spend one year in another country to learn more about the culture. My other sister, Sabine, is 33 years old and lives in Minden, too.
She is a funny, good listener and reliable person. My parents are wonderful people and I am very thankful that they give me the chance to spend a year abroad. They support my decision and help me a lot. We always eat our meals together and we love to travel around Germany and other countries. My father, Udo, is 57 years old and a teacher at my school. He instructs social sciences and evangelical religion. He also studied Master of Public Health. My mother, Birgit, is also 57 years old and an employee at a health insurance.

Another important thing in my life are my friends. My best friend is Dominik.
I know him 10 years and we do a lot of things together, like traveling and go special events. I can entrust him everything. We are a good team and good friends. My best female friend is Johanna. I know her for about 4 years. When I was 12 I went to a Youth camp and there I met her for the first time. We become best friends and we do many things together, as well. Since 3 years we are at the same school and in the same class. So I come to the next point of the letter.

I go to the Herder-grammar school which is just 4 kilometers away from my home, so it takes only 10-15 minutes to ride by bike there. In school, my favorite subjects are English and sport. I am one of about 1350 students at my school.

The German school is totally different from all over the world. I can only dream of subjects like journalism and Car mechanics. Last year I have participated in an Essay Competition. It was a great experience to write a whole story in English. I am lucky with my class. I think we have a good class spirit and a great together. I have got a very good relationship with the most of my class and some of my other friends are in my class, too.

In my free time I like to play the drums, to listen to music, to play soccer and to be at the Youth Fire Department. At the Youth Fire Department you don’t just learn how to put out a fire, you also learn teamwork and to leave on other people. It’s a good facility. I am playing the drums for 3 years and I am not that bad. My favorite music is Rock, but also every other kind of music.

Before 2 years, my grandmother died. She lived at a small apartment together with my granddad. My granddad was bedridden, so he couldn’t get out of the apartment. So I went to him every week, sometimes 2 times a week, to help him.
I washed his hair and creamed his back. It wasn’t disgusting for me, because he isn’t a stranger person. In January of this year he died, too.

My friends picture me as agreeable, conscientious, reliable, sociable, determined, adaptable, innovative, confident, creative, humorous, helpful, open-mined, outgoing, family-oriented and straightforward person.

In the future I want to be same person like now. I mean, I want to have the same good personality. I want to be a Pilot or I want to have my own company. With these experiences you’ll give me, I could reach all these goals. I would have more experience then other people, and I could work in another country, as well.

I think I would be a great gain for you, your family and all around you. I would learn something about your culture, and you would learn something about mine. Maybe you will get an association how the Germans are.

I would be very happy if you would choose me for being the exchange student in your family. I’m very excited to meet you, the different country and the different culture.
I hope you enjoyed reading my letter and getting an association who I am.

Yours sincerely,

Ich glaub mit „to leave on other people“ meinst du sich auf jemanden verlassen oder?
Das würde dann allerdings meines begrenzten Wissens nach to count on sb oder to have trust in sb heißen… To leave heißt ja verlassen im Sinne von weggehen und das würde den Satz etwas komisch wirken lassen :grin:

liebe Grüße

Nach ca.4 stunden habe ich ihn endlich fertig: den Hostfamily letter.
natürlich habe ich noch meinen namen usw. daruf geschrieben, aber dasss muss ja nicht jeder wissen^^ danke schon im vorraus an die eifrigen leser und leserinnen!

Dear Host Family,

How would you begin a letter for people you don’t even know? First off all I want to thank you for just thinking about being a host family for me. It’s nice from you to give me the chance to spend one year abroad. To show you that I am the right exchange student for you, I will write here something about me and my life.

My name is Philipp Winter. I’m a 15-year-old-boy but when I come to you I’ll be 16.I live in Germany, in a town called Minden where I also was born. In Minden live about 85.000 people.
I think this year would be a wonderful opportunity for me. I want to become more self-confident and independent. I would improve my English and it will be easier for me to apply for a job.
I live with my parents in a house with a beautiful garden and a nice view. I have 2 sisters, which are much older than me. My “Little”-sister, Kathrin, is 27 years old and lives in Switzerland. She is a funny and sporty person, but also a good listener. After she finished school, she went as an Au-pair to the USA for 1 year. Since then I also want to spend one year in another country to learn more about the culture. My other sister, Sabine, is 33 years old and lives in Minden, too.
She is a funny, good listener and reliable person. My parents are wonderful people and I am very thankful that they give me the chance to spend a year abroad. They support my decision and help me a lot. We always eat our meals together and we love to travel around Germany and other countries. My father, Udo, is 57 years old and a teacher at my school. He instructs social sciences and evangelical religion. He also studied Master of Public Health. My mother, Birgit, is also 57 years old and an employee at a health insurance.

Another important thing in my life are my friends. My best friend is Dominik.
I know him 10 years and we do a lot of things together, like traveling and go special events. I can entrust him everything. We are a good team and good friends. My best female friend is Johanna. I know her for about 4 years. When I was 12 I went to a Youth camp and there I met her for the first time. We become best friends and we do many things together, as well. Since 3 years we are at the same school and in the same class. So I come to the next point of the letter.

I go to the Herder-grammar school which is just 4 kilometers away from my home, so it takes only 10-15 minutes to ride by bike there. In school, my favorite subjects are English and sport. I am one of about 1350 students at my school.

The German school is totally different from all over the world. I can only dream of subjects like journalism and Car mechanics. Last year I have participated in an Essay Competition. It was a great experience to write a whole story in English. I am lucky with my class. I think we have a good class spirit and a great together. I have got a very good relationship with the most of my class and some of my other friends are in my class, too.

In my free time I like to play the drums, to listen to music, to play soccer and to be at the Youth Fire Department. At the Youth Fire Department you don’t just learn how to put out a fire, you also learn teamwork and to leave on other people. It’s a good facility. I am playing the drums for 3 years and I am not that bad. My favorite music is Rock, but also every other kind of music.

Before 2 years, my grandmother died. She lived at a small apartment together with my granddad. My granddad was bedridden, so he couldn’t get out of the apartment. So I went to him every week, sometimes 2 times a week, to help him.
I washed his hair and creamed his back. It wasn’t disgusting for me, because he isn’t a stranger person. In January of this year he died, too.

My friends picture me as agreeable, conscientious, reliable, sociable, determined, adaptable, innovative, confident, creative, humorous, helpful, open-mined, outgoing, family-oriented and straightforward person.

In the future I want to be same person like now. I mean, I want to have the same good personality. I want to be a Pilot or I want to have my own company. With these experiences you’ll give me, I could reach all these goals. I would have more experience then other people, and I could work in another country, as well.

I think I would be a great gain for you, your family and all around you. I would learn something about your culture, and you would learn something about mine. Maybe you will get an association how the Germans are.

I would be very happy if you would choose me for being the exchange student in your family. I’m very excited to meet you, the different country and the different culture.
I hope you enjoyed reading my letter and getting an association who I am.

Yours sincerely,

… das ich momentan in den USA mit AFS bin habe ich etwas erfahrung mit den gastfamilien briefen und ich habe mir mal die muehe gemacht es zu verbessern… nicht falsch verstehen! nur die grammatik…

Dear Host Family,

How would you begin a letter for people you don’t even know? First off all I want to thank you for just thinking about being a host family for me. It’s nice from you to give me the chance to spend one year abroad. To show you that I am the right exchange student for you, I will write here something about me ( MYSELF) and my life.

My name is Philipp Winter. I’m a 15-year-old-boy but when I (hier muss Futur verwendet werden, also: WHEN I WILL COME…) come to you I’ll be 16.I live in Germany, in a town called Minden where I (I’M) also was born. In Minden live about 85.000 people. ( MINDENS POPULATION IS ABOUT… )
I think this year would be a wonderful opportunity for me. I want to become more self-confident and independent. I would improve my English and it will be easier for me to apply for a job.
I live with my parents in a house with a beautiful garden and a nice view. I have 2 sisters, which are much older than me. My “Little”-sister, Kathrin, is 27 years old and lives in Switzerland. She is a funny and sporty person, but also a good listener. After she finished school, she went as an Au-pair to the USA for 1 year. Since then I also want to spend one year in another country to learn more about the culture. My other sister, Sabine, is 33 years old and lives in Minden, too.
She is a funny, good listener and reliable person. My parents are wonderful people and I am very thankful that they give me the chance to spend a year abroad. They support my decision and help me a lot. We always eat our meals together and we love to travel around Germany and other countries. My father, Udo, is 57 years old and a teacher at my school. He instructs social sciences and evangelical religion. He also studied Master of Public Health. My mother, Birgit, is also 57 years old and an employee at a health insurance.

Another important thing in my life are my friends. My best friend is Dominik.
I know him (FOR) 10 years and we do a lot of things together, like traveling and go (TO) special events. I can entrust him everything. We are a good team and good friends. My best female friend is Johanna. I know her for about 4 years. When I was 12 I went to a Youth camp and there I met her for the first time. We become (BECAME) best friends and we do many things together, as well. Since 3 years we are at the same school and in the same class. So I come to the next point of the letter.

I go to the Herder-grammar school which is just 4 kilometers away from my home, so it takes only 10-15 minutes to ride by bike there. In school, my favorite subjects are English and sport(GYM, sport heisst etwas anderes). I am one of about 1350 students at my school.

The German school is totally different from all over the world. I can only dream of subjects like journalism and Car mechanics. Last year I have participated in an Essay Competition. It was a great experience to write a whole story in English. I am lucky with my class. I think we have a good class spirit and a great together (was meinste damit? ). I have got a very good relationship with the most of my class and some of my other friends are in my class, too.

In my free time I like to play the drums, to listen to music, to play soccer and to be at the Youth Fire Department. At the Youth Fire Department you don’t just learn how to put out a fire, you also learn teamwork and to leave on other people. It’s a good facility. I am playing the drums for 3 years and I am not that bad. My favorite music is Rock, but also every other kind of music.

Before 2 years (2 YEars Ago), my grandmother died. She lived at a small apartment together with my granddad. My granddad was bedridden, so he couldn’t get out of the apartment. So I went to him every week, sometimes 2 times (TWICE) a week, to help him.
I washed his hair and creamed his back. It wasn’t disgusting for me, because he isn’t a stranger person. In January of this year he died, too.

My friends picture me as agreeable, conscientious, reliable, sociable, determined, adaptable, innovative, confident, creative, humorous, helpful, open-mined, outgoing, family-oriented and straightforward person.

In the future I want to be same person like now. I mean, I want to have the same good personality. I want to be a Pilot or I want to have my own company. With these experiences you’ll give me, I could reach all these goals. I would have more experience then other people, and I could work in another country, as well.

I think I would be a great gain for you, your family and all around you. I would learn something about your culture, and you would learn something about mine. Maybe you will get an association how the Germans are.

I would be very happy if you would choose me for being the exchange student in your family. I’m very excited to meet you, the different country and the different culture.
I hope you enjoyed reading my letter and getting an association who I am.

Yours sincerely,


Dein Brief an die gastfamilie ist echt gut! Hut ab… hattest auch nicht so viele fehler… hab auch nicht alle verbessert nur die die am meisten wehgetan haben… haha… denn sonst klingt es nicht mehr natuerlich…

:+1::+1:

wuensche dir sehr viel glueck!

„How would you begin a letter for people you don’t even know?“
Ich wuerde das vielleicht herauslassen, weil es irgendwie einen Abstand zwischen dir und dem Leser schafft. Ansonsten ist der Brief gut!

dein anfang is echt super (ich schreib gad meinen eigenen, danke für die inspirtation :grin:)

ich würde aber an deiner stelle nicht ganz so viel über deine familie schreiben! sie sehen doch auch noch den rest der bewerbung, wo normalerweise einzelheiten wie das alter stehen!

ansonsten wirklich sehr gut !! :grinning:

LoL… da lese ich den Brief und muss feststellen, dass du aus Minden kommst?!
Ich komm aus Porta =)
:grin: