Host family letter.. again :)

Hey, bitte einfach mal drübergucken, würd mir echt viel bedeuten :slight_smile:

Dear Host Familiy,
How are you? Well, first of all, I would like to say how glad I am for you giving me the opportunity to spend a year in a ‘other world’, because I think there’s no way to compare Germany and the U.S., that’s one of the reasons I developed the wish to spend a year abroad. I’m looking forward to seeing you soon and spending time with you. In the following lines I try to describe myself and I thank you for even reading them.
My name is Hanna and I’m a fifteen-year-old, open-minded student who lives in a small village called *** which is near the Austrian border and the Bavarian alps. Here I live with my parents and my elder sister. My father ** is head of quality management in a firm that produces soft-drinks, my mother ** is a yoga-teacher and Sophia, my sister, is going to graduate this year, her final exams are in May. We both visit the ‘Gymnasium XY’ (www.gymnasium-xy.de).
In general, I have a good relationship with my parents, so we often do things together, e.g. skiing in winter or swimming in summer. My sister and I are getting along, expect from these little fights, sister are having after all, really well. I guess our relationships are the result of the respect we pay each other. I haven’t got any problems with doing housework, at home I do e.g. tidying up and cleaning our home and sometimes I cook and wash clothes. Plus, I’m taking care of our dog Luna.
Now I would like to introduce myself, because in my opinion introducing someone means more than just saying his or her name. So I’m going to tell you more about my personality.
I’ve been interested in discovering since I was six or so. Back then, I was fascinated by discovering the neighbors’ garden, today I give myself no longer satisfied with that, because over the years, I gave ‘to discover’ a completely new definition: ‘to see something different’. And that’s exactly what I’m going to do during my year abroad. So you don’t need to waste your time with questions like: “Is she really going to do something that is unusual in her mother country?” because that’s exactly what I want. I want to get to know a new culture, new ways of life; I want new eyes I can see the world through. So I ask you for giving me the ability, the possibility and the permission to see. I hope that figures with your expectations towards me.
Furthermore, I’m ambitious, what can be a good or a bad thing, because on one side, it makes me never giving up, but after I wasn’t successful at something, I’m in a not very good mood; I’m also confident, what is something my parents raised me to be. Besides, I’m caring, in general about everything. In my free time, I do a lot of sports. Playing volleyball, riding a bike, jogging with my dog, spending time with snowboarding, or swimming, to be more specific. I’m creative and like to express myself in drawings or texts, plus I join the drama club at our school. I’m an interested student, what you can see by looking at my English (or any other) grades.
After I have finished school, I want to study, I’m not quite sure what exactly, because I can think of so many things, e.g. a teacher.
I actually don’t attend church. The explanation’s easy: It’s not like I wouldn’t accept church or something, but I think there are other ways to believe in god than by going to church and I don’t agree with some (medieval) points of views, no offense. But if you attend church, I wouldn’t mind going with you.
I expect from my year abroad to bring home some new expressions, to improve and perfect my English skills and to, like I’ve already said, discover everything.
I think you cannot get to know me in these lines, but you can at least suspect what kind of person I am, but I’d like to stress one more time how thankful I am.
I would rate it so much, when I could be a part of your family. I know it is a big challenge, for you and for me.
It really means a lot to me, that you’ve read this letter. I can’t wait to get to know you,
Yours Sinceerly,
Hanna

hey :slight_smile:

also ich denk, insgesamt gut gelungen :slight_smile:
hier noch ein paar änderungsvorschläge:(hoffe du verstehst, was gemeint ist)

-se little fights, sisterS are having
-I’ve been interested in discovering since I was six or so. (ich würde schreiben, i´ve always been interested. klingt besser und ist doch eigentlich auch wahr, oder?)
-what you can see by looking at my English (or any other) grades. (würd ich weglassen, kommt irgendwie eingebildet rüber, auch wenns nicht so gemeint ist)
-Yours Sinceerly, (ist höflich, aber freundlicher klingt, see you soon (in america) )

mit der kirche weiß ich nicht, ob ich das genauso schreiben würde, ich glaube man sollte nicht so sagen, dass man ganz anders als die kirche glaubt. was, wenn die gastfamilie sehr christlich ist?
und vlt noch sowas wie "if you have any other questions,please write/mail,… me i would be glad to get a message of you… oder sowas.

aber wie gesagt, insgesamt gut :slight_smile:

danke, überarbeitet:)
jeder der noch was findet, einfach sagen :))

ich hab zwar noch nich viel gelesen (keine zeit) aber mir ist gleich ein kleiner fehler aufgefallen. Es heißt in der ich glaube dritten zeile nicht a other world sondern an other world, aber is ja nur n kleiner fehler :wink:
Außerdem finde ich den um ehrlich zu sein etwas formell, aber es ist ja dein brot :wink:
Viel glück in den usa
Lg

ich hab zwar noch nich viel gelesen (keine zeit) aber mir ist gleich ein kleiner fehler aufgefallen. Es heißt in der ich glaube dritten zeile nicht a other world sondern an other world, aber is ja nur n kleiner fehler :wink:
Außerdem finde ich den um ehrlich zu sein etwas formell, aber es ist ja dein brot :wink:
Viel glück in den usa
Lg

ich als Oberklugscheisser setz noch einen drauf: nich an other, sondern another :wink:

oh ja? Kann man das nicht so oder so schreiben :smiley:

jaaa, geht aber nicht, ich hab ja ‚other world‘ in anfürhrungzeichen geschrieben naja

ahh das hab ich gar nich gesehn :wink:
Dann schreib am besten an ‚other world‘ :slight_smile:

ahh das hab ich gar nich gesehn :wink:
Dann schreib am besten an ‚other world‘ :slight_smile:

danke, erstmal aber siehst du sonst noch iwelche rechtschreibfehler, weil cih seh die nicht :smiley:

Hey :slight_smile:

ich hab den brief auch nicht ganz gelesen aber am anfang, da hast du ja geschrieben and i thank you for even reading them.
hm… ich find das klingt irgendwie komisch… wenn man das mal ins deutsche übersetzt heißt das ja soviel wie danke das ihr den brief überhaupt lest.
das klingt irgendwie als ob du denkst das die gastfamilie sich herunter lassen müsste um den brief zu lesen. verstehst du was ich meine?

ich würd das einfach weglassen :slight_smile:
sonst war alles glaub ich gut was ich gelesen habe :slight_smile:

ganz liebe Grüße :slight_smile: