Gastfamilienbrief verbesserungsvorschläge?

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Nun ist es soweit und ich muss einen Gastafmilienbrief schreiben, allerdings für meine Gastafmilie, die ich NOCH NICHT habe traurig
Habt ihr Verbesserungsvorschläge oder Umänderungen? unhappy
Besonders weil ich mich für ein Stipendium bei Ayusa bewerbe, möchte ich natürlich, das alles perfekt ist Thumb up

Dear hostfamily,

My Name is xx xx and I am sixteen years old. I am living in a little city near cologne which is called xx with about 15.000 citizens. I write to you because I want to learn more about your culture and your daily life. I would be very glad, if you a short impression of me and my life here in Germany.

I am living in a house with my mother and my stepfather. My brother is studying in Dortmund on ISM. (International School of Management) My mother work as a Projectassistance and my stepfather as a Information Technology Expert for Industrie.I am in the 10th grade at a high school and my favourite subjects are Math, chemistry and English.

At home I have to do tasks all day, like wash the dishes and tidy up my room. Moreover, I learn all day for school to get good notes. When everything is done I meet my friends to go swimming or just hanging up, cook or read a book which makes me fun.My friends say that I am friendly, open, ambitious, thankful and have a open mind.

I think you imagine the question, why I would like to live a whole year in the USA. That's a easy question for me. My uncle live in the USA and when I was eleven I went to my uncle in the winter holidays and at this moment, I am impressed at this country. I like the people there and the fact that everything is so big.

I am happy that I have no allergies, so it is no problem for me to live with dogs, cats, horses or others together. Indeed I don’t eat any meat although is it no problem for me when others eat meat when I , for example, sit in front of them who are eating meat.

I know that the most americans going on sundays in church because they are mostly religious. Altough I am not religious but is it not a problem for me, to go on sundays in church because I want as much as possible to integrate me in your familiy!

I have so much questions to you that i want to ask. Am I have host siblings? If yes, are they going to the school which will my school then too? Do you have pets? Am I have my own room? Whats are the hobbys of your familiy? It is often sunny where you live?

I am so thankful that you admit me in your family! I know, we'll have a lot of fun together and hope you thing the same. I have so much anticipation to get you know!

Annika Hans

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So, ich versuchs mal:

...with about 15.000 inhabitants. I am writing to you because I would like to learn more about your culture and your daily life. I would be very glad if I could give you a short impression of me and my life in Germany.

My brother is currently attending ISM (International School of Management) at Dortmund [vielleicht kurz erklären wo das liegt]
My mother is working as a project-assistant and my stepfather is an IT-expert.
I am studying at high school, in 10th grade, my favorite subjects are mathematics, chemistry and English.

At home I have to help in the household, for example washing the dishes or cleaning my room. Since I want to be a good student and get good grades, I have to study a lot, but when I am done with all my duties, I am meeting my friends, go swimming or just hang out, cook or read a book what I really enjoy.
My friends would describe me as a friendly, open-minded and ambitious person.

Maybe you are asking yourself why I would love to spent one year at the U.S. That is an easy question for me: my uncle lives in the U.S. and when I was younger I spent my holidays at his house and I was and still am impressed of the country. I like the people there and that everything is just very big there.

I do not have any allergies, so animals will not be a problem for me. I love animals very much, that is the reason why I am a vegetarian what means I do not eat any meat and I do not like it when other people are eating meat in front of me.

I know that most americans are going to church every Sunday, because their religion is very important for them, I am not religious at all, but I would not have a problem with going to church with you every Sunday.

I have so many questions that I would like to ask you, for example if I would have any host siblings, if they would attend the same school like me; If you have any pets; Would I have my own room?;How is the climate in your city?

I am so happy that you would allow me to be a part of your family and to live together with you for one year! I hope that we are going to have a lot of fun together and that you are just as happy as I am. I am very keen on getting to know you better!

Annika

vom 5.7.2015 21:06
A. R.


kleine änderungen

dein brief ist ja schon richtig gut, nur ein paar kleine fehler. ich finde zwar dass kleine fehler überhaupt nicht schaden da du ja dorthin gehst um dein englisch zu verbessern, aber ich versuch trotzdem mal kleine änderungen zu machen:

My Name is xx xx and I am sixteen years old. I live in a small city in Germany, Switzerland,...(wo auch immer du lebst), called xx. about 15.000 live there. I am writing you this letter because I would like you to know what my german life looks like.

I live with my mother and my stepfather, my brother is currently attending ISM in Dortmund. (International School of Management) My mother works as a Projectassistance and my stepfather is an Information Technology Expert for Industrie. I am a 10th grader at a local high school and my favorite subjects are Math, Chemistry and English.

At home I help in the household a lot. I wash, clean up my room,...(hab gerade vergessen was du geschrieben hast)
School is very important to me, so I spend a lot of time studying because I want to get good grades. When everything is done I meet my friends to go swimming or just hang out, cook or read a book which I love to do. My friends would describe me as friendly, open, ambitious, appreciative and open-minded

You'd probably like to know why I decided to move to a foreign country and live away from home for a whole year, and why I chose to go to the USA. I can answer that very easily. My uncle lives in the States and when I was eleven I went to visit him during my winter break. From the moment I got there I was impressed by this country. I liked the people there and the fact that everything is so big. (Ich würde noch etwas mehr schreiben und die Sache mit big genau erklären, nicht dass sie meinen dass du denkst dass alle Leute auch big sing ;)

I am really grateful and lucky not to have any allergies, so it would be no problem for me to live with dogs, cats, horses or other animals. Indeed I don’t eat meat although it i no problem for me when others do.

I know that many Americans are religious and join religious events. Even though I am not religious I would love to participate in those events (if you are part of a religion) because I want to integrate myself into your family as well as possible.

Ich würde den Abschnitt mit den Fragen weglassen, da es so rüberkommt als ob du hohe Erwartungen an die Familie hast (Geschwister, Haustiere,...) Ich würde ganz einfach sagen: I'm very thankful that you are willing to host me and I am really excited to get to know you better. I'm sure that we will have a lot of fun!!

Mehr Persönliches :)

Hallo Annika,
Ich fliege auch dieses Jahr in die USA mit Ayusa und musste diesen Brief bereits schrieben. Ich würde dir empfehlen vielleicht noch mehr über deine Hobbies zu erzählen ( Sport, Musik, etc.) Denn letztendlich interessiert sich deine Hostfamily mehr dafür als ob du zuhause mithilfst, würde ich mal sagen.

Liebe Grüße Hanna Smily

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