Gastfamilienbrief nach China

Austauschschüler Forum Vor dem Auslandsjahr
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Hallo allerseits

Ich habe jetzt endlich meinen gastfamilienbrief fertig und würde mich freuen wenn ihr euch die mühe machen würdet ihn zu lesen, mir eure meinung dazu sagen würdet und eventuell verbesserungsvorschläge macht.

danke schon im vorraus!

Dear family

First of all I want to thank you for welcoming me in your family for a half year and giving me the chance to get to know more about your culture and language. It has always been a big wish of me to spend an exchange year in china, to see how a chines family lives and learn something about the chines school-system. Reasons for this are my chines friends and my dad who is often on business travel in china. They all told my about the absorbing impressions, the mentality and the open-end possibilitys, they have fascinated my by this way. I have also seen many documentarys and of cours the olympic plays in china and I’m really impressed. I aim at learning many for future, on one hand to learn more about my self, a foreign cultur and a foreign mantality and on the other hand to be able to speak mandarin.

Now i want to tell you something about me. My name is Nicole Bernoitner, im 15 years old and I’m Austrian. I have long, brown hair, blue-green eyes and I’m 1,70 meter high.
My home village is called Roßbach and is quite a small village with less than thousand inhabitants, surrounded form a nice area, lain in upperaustria, near Germany. I have a twin sister called Eva and a brother named Manuel who is 16 years old. I live together with them by my parents. My mother Erika is 42 years old and works as a mobile nurse, my father Rudolf who has just selebrated his 50th birthday is the manager of a business for building glas-machines. I’ve a good relationship to all my family members and we do a lot of thing together. For instance we make a trip to city’s and go sight-seeing, visit amusement parks or go hiking. With my siblings I can talk about nearly everything and we often have fun togeher of course there are also sometimes little conflicts but we reconcile us fast. My parents always stand behind me and back me in my wish to go to china, because they also feel confident of this country. Another very important factor are my friends, I go to school with most of them or we are together in clubs. We undertake many things, we speak boldly, go shopping, meet in the afternoon, do sports, go to the cinema or we sometimes go out in the evening.

I would describe myself as very open, because I’m always ready to get to know new thing and I’m very curious. Another character is my cooperativeness, I respect experienced people and can also take critic, which is sometimes even necessary. I’m a friendly person, like to get know new people and like to spend time with them.
My hobbys are meeting friends, doing sports, playing the transverse flute, baking, cooking, surfing in the internet, reading, traveling and a lot more. My favourite sports are tennis, volleyball, hiking and mountain biking but I also would like to get to know chines sports.
Transverse flute I have been playing since seven years with buzz and I’m an active member of our musical society, where we rehearse on time a week and we play at musical events and at churchy occasions. My ardour of baking I got to know one and a half year ago and I love to test and divise new recipes and to decorate cakes, hence I’m really clamped on chines recipes.
I also have sometimes to help in the houshold and I do things like cooking, washing the dishes, mowing and making the washings.

I’m visiting the 10th grade at the grammar school in Braunau, and I have been learning English for seven years and for one and a half year Latin. Unfortunately there is no subject for learning mandarin and so I try my best to learn basic knowledges myselfe. My favorite subjects are Maths, Music, English and Sports, but I’m also interested in sciences and other subjects.
After finishing school I supposable will study or take part at a further apprenticeship. What I will do in future I don’t know yet, but I’m sure it will be something in the social business.

For my exchange year it’s important to me that my family gladly absorbs me and that they will show and tell me about China and I gladly can tell you something about the european cultur and especially about the Austrian culture.

I’m looking forward to meet you

Yours sincerly

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Hey,
erst mal möchte ich anmerken dass dein Brief wirklich gut geworden ist!
Die meisten Verbesserungen sind nur Kleinigkeiten und manchmal würden deine Sätze auch funktionieren, nur es klingt eben nicht so geläufig.
Das einzige, was du nochmal durchgehen musst sind die -ie-'s beim Plural (Country → Countries, Documentary → Documentaries etc.), weiß nämlich nicht ob ich alle verbessert habe.
Anderweitig alles gute & viel Spaß bei deinem Austauschjahr in China!

First of all I want to thank you for welcoming me in your family for HALF A YEAR and FOR giving me the chance to get to know more about your culture and language. It has always been a big wish of me (BESSER: I’ve always dreamd about spending…) to spend an exchange year in china, to see how a chinesE family lives and TO learn something about the chinesE school-system. Reasons for this (BESSER: My interest in China arises from my…) are my chinesE friends and my dad who is often on business TRIPS in china. They all told ME about the absorbing impressions, the mentality and the open-end (BESSER: countless oder innumerable) possibilitIEs. I have also seen many documentarIEs and of cours the olympic GAMES in china and I’m really impressed. I aim at learning many for future, on THE one hand to learn more about myself, a foreign cultur and a foreign mEntality and on the other hand to be able to speak mandarin (BESSER: to learn speaking mandarin).

Now (BESSER: First) I want (HÖFLICHER: I’d like) to tell you something about MYSELF. My name is Nicole Bernoitner, im 15 years old and I’m Austrian. I have long, brown hair, blue-green eyes and I’m 1,70 meter TALL.
My home village is called Roßbach and IT’S quite a small village with less than thousand inhabitants, surrounded form a nice area, lain in upperaustria, near Germany. I have a twin sister called Eva and a brother named Manuel who is 16 years old. I live together with them AND my parents (ODER: at my parents home). My mother Erika is 42 years old and works as a mobile nurse, my father Rudolf who has just Celebrated his 50th birthday is the manager of a COMPANY WHICH PRODUCES GLASS MACHINES. I HAVE a good relationship to all my family members (BESSER: my whole family) and we do a lot of thing together. For instance we make a trip to CITIES and go sight-seeing, visit amusement parks or go hiking. With my siblings I can talk about nearly everything and we often have fun togeher. of course there are also sometimes little conflicts but we reconcile us fast. My parents always stand behind me and back me in my wish to go to china, because they also feel confident of this country. Another very important factor are my friends. MOST OF THEM ARE MY CLASSMATES or we ATTEND THE SAME CLUBS. We undertake many things (BESSER: We do a lot of things together), we speak boldly, go shopping, meet in the afternoon, do sports, go to the cinema or we sometimes go out in the evening.

I would describe myself as very open (BESSER: open-minded), because I’m always ready (BESSER: happy) to get to know new thing and I’m very curious. Another CHARACTERISTIC is my cooperativeness, I respect experienced people and can also take critic, which is sometimes even necessary. I’m a friendly person AND I like to get know new people AND SPEND time with them.
My hobbIEs are meeting friends, doing sports, playing the transverse flute, baking, cooking, surfing in the internet, reading, traveLLing and a lot more. My favourite sports are tennis, volleyball, hiking and mountain biking but I also would like to get to know chinesE sports.
Transverse flute I have been playing FOR seven years with buzz and I’m an active member of our musical society, where we rehearse onE time a week and we play at musical events and at churchy occasions. My ardour of baking I got to know one and a half year ago and I love to test and divise new recipes and to decorate cakes, hence I’m really clamped on chines recipes.
SOMETIMES I ALSO HELP IN THE HOUSEHOLD and I do things like cooking, washing the dishes, mowing and making the washings.

AT THE MOMENT I ATTEND THE 10th GRADE OF grammar school in Braunau, and I have been learning English for seven years and LATIN FOR ONE YEAR AND A HALF. Unfortunately there is NO POSSIBILITY for learning mandarin AT MY SCHOOL and so I try my best to learn basic knowledges myselfe. My favorite subjects are Maths, Music, English and Sports, but I’m also interested in sciences and other subjects.
After finishing school I supposable will study or take part at a further apprenticeship. I DON’T HAVE ANY SPECIFIC PLANS FOR MY FUTURE YET, but I’m sure it will be something in the social business.

For my exchange year it’s important to me (BESSER: For me it’s important that my host-family gladly…) that my family gladly absorbs me and that they will show and tell me about China and I gladly can tell you something about the european culturE, ESPECIALLY ABOUT THE AUSTRIAN ONE.

I’m looking forward to meet you

Yours sincerly (BESSER: Einfach „Yours“)

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Hey

Vielen Dank für deine Verbesserungen und Vorschläge!
Werde ich gleich ausbessern.

lg Nicole