Brief an host family, bitte lesen und verbessern, wäre ganz toll!

Ich bin seit 4 Jahren raus aus der schule und deshalb nich mehr so gut in englisch…brauche dringend hilfe…danke!

wenn euch noch was einfällt was rein muss, bitte auch dazu schreiben, bin für alle tips dankbar!

Dear host family,

First of all I would like to thank you for welcoming me in your family for six months and giving me the chance to know how an Irish family lives and get to know a fascinating land. IŽm very curious and I am looking forward to experience your country.

So to get you to know me a little bit better I would like you to tell something about me, my hobbies, my family and my daily life.
My name is …, IŽm twenty yeary old and lives in …, the provinicial capital of … in Germany…lies at the Baltic Sea and the part of the city that i live is near at the Kiel Fjord.
My hair is brown and i have green eyes, IŽm ca. 1,60 cm height and slim. I live with my mother and my father in a house with a small garden, near the centre. My mother called …, she is 45 years old and a housewife, my father called …, he is 47 years old and he is a Wasserbauer. IŽm sad to say that i havenŽt siblings, i wish that all the time. But i have a good relationship with my parents.

I love animals, i have two guineapigs called Punker and Ville and two snakes they called fridolin and paula, also we have a wellensittich and a lot of fish.

In my free time i like to listen a lot of music, meet friends or read books. IŽm interested in photography and take a lot of photos by myself in the nature. My taste of music is very varied, i like Rock-Music, Heavy Metal, Ska and Reggea, but also i like folk (specially Irish folk!!) and music with medieval instruments. I visit a lot of concerts and festivals.

When i spend time with my friends we talk about anything and everything and have a nice evening in a bar, a restaurant, coffee bar or in a club. Or we go on a shoppingtour!
I have a lot of books, specially crimes, fantasy or lovestorys, two of my favorite authors are Terry Pratchett and Haruki Murakami.

I donŽt go in for sports, but maybe i like a irish sport?
IŽm very enterprising and i like to travel and see other countrys and whose people, cultures and their lifestyle.
I would like to adventure and see a lot of Ireland and experience your country!

I would like to describe me as a happy person, but i can also shy. IŽm interested for new things and …bla das weiß ich nich.
At the most days IŽm cheerful and … (?)

My friends describe me as a happy, amusingly, insightfully, very nicely, empathetically, senitive, faithfully, truthfully, obligingly and fun-loving.

In the year 2004 IŽm finished my secondary school certificate on the …in …, in august 2004 i start my education as dental- assistant and finished that in 2007. Since that i work in this job and established as much i like the work with children and will follow my career in this orientation.
contingent on this job i have a lot of varied experience with nervous and fearfully children, but in other moments she makes a laugh (?) and are very funny.
My boss had a two years old daughter and sometimes we have a look at she. (?)

For a few years i have done baby-sitting from time to time in the neighbourhood and had a lot of fun.

Before i begin with the Au-Pair i would like to do a practical work in a playschool and to attend on a english- course. Beside i must cancel my job, besides i have to heeding the cancelation period, that is why i hope i hear from you as fast as possible . I hope i can live at you from january to june.

I have decided to Au-Pair because i will get to know a new country and new people, i have fun to look after kids, to gain experience, to improve my command of english and take more individuality.

After the time as Au-Pair i will begin a education as governess.

I hope you have a impression from me and look forward a personal meeting, IŽm very impatient for you and i hope we a good time together!

Nice greetings

Hi,
ich find deinen Text total gut. Teilweise weiß
ich gar nicht worüber du redest, weil ich nicht
so gut in Englisch bin. Aber ein Frage in einer Zeile
sagst du irgendwie in the town that i live
ich würd da sagen in the town where i live.
Aber ich weiß nicht was richtig ist.
Ansonsten ist es echt cool.
gruß jessi

the part of the city that i live
genau so wars
the part of the city where i live

mag sich noch jemand die mühe machen ihn zu lesen?:confounded:

IŽm very curious and I am looking forward to experiencing your country.
(forward to immer mit ing!!)

So, to get you to know me a little bit better I would like to tell you something about me, my hobbies, my family and my daily life.
My name is …, IŽm twenty yeary old and live in …, the provinicial capital of … in Germany…lying/which lies at the Baltic Sea and the part of the city that i live in is near at the Kiel Fjord.
My hair is brown and i have green eyes, IŽm ca. 1,60 m tall and slim. I live with my mother and my father in a house with a small garden, near the city centre. My mother is called …, she is 45 years old and a housewife, my father is called …, he is 47 years old and he is a Wasserbauer. (vllt. erklärst du das iwie?)

IŽm sad to say that i havenŽt any siblings, i wish that all the time. But i have a good relationship with my parents.

I love animals, i have two guineapigs called Punker and Ville and two snakes they called fridolin and paula, also we have a budgie and a lot of fish.

In my free time i like to listen to a lot of music, meet friends or read books. IŽm interested in photography and take a lot of photos by myself in the nature. My taste of music is very varied, i like Rock-Music, Heavy Metal, Ska and Reggea, but i like folk (specially Irish folk!!) and music with medieval instruments, as well. I visit a lot of concerts and festivals.

When i spend time with my friends we talk about everything and have a nice evening in a bar, a restaurant, coffee bar or in a club. Or we go on a shoppingtour!
I have a lot of books, especially crimes, fantasy or lovestorys. Two of my favorite authors are Terry Pratchett and Haruki Murakami.

I donŽt go in for sports (kann man das sagen? nimm vllt. eher: i’m not good at sport/I don’t like doing sports/…), but maybe i like an irish sport?
IŽm very enterprising and i like to travel and see other countrys and its’ people, cultures and their lifestyle.
I would like to adventure and see a lot of Ireland and experience your country!

I describe me as a happy person, but i can also be shy. IŽm interested in new things and …bla das weiß ich nich.
At the most days IŽm cheerful and … (?)
(ich kenn dich nich, aknn dir also auch nich wirklich helfen. vllt hilfbereit oder positiv-denkend?!?)

My friends describe me as a happy, amusingly, insightfully, very nicely, empathetically, senitive, faithfully, truthfully, obligingly and fun-loving person. (hm… setz doch einfach ein paar von den sachen oben ein ;))

In the year 2004 I finished my secondary school certificate on the …in … in august 2004 i started my education as a dental- assistant and finished that in 2007. Since i work in this job and established myself, i like to work with children and will follow my career in this direction.
i have a lot of varied experience with nervous and fearful children, but in other moments … (was willst du sagen? versteh den satz nich, sry^^)
My boss has a two years old daughter and sometimes we (we? von wem sprichste da? vllt. besser I) have a look at her.

For a few years i have done baby-sitting from time to time in the neighbourhood and had a lot of fun.

Before i begin with my half-year as an Au-Pair i would like to do a practical work in a playschool and attend on an english- course. I hope I hear from you as fast as possible because I have to cancel my job and there’s a cancelation period I have to pay heed to. I hope i can live at your house from january to june.

I have decided to become an Au-Pair because i’d like to get known to a new country and new people, i have fun to look after kids, to gain experience, to improve my command of english and take more individuality. (meinst du hier vllt. eher unabhängigkeit, also independence?)

After the time as Au-Pair i am going to start an education as a governess.

I hope I could give you a good impression of myself and look forward to your answer.

Nice greetings

so, ich hab den text einfach mal umgeschrieben, hoffe, dass ich nicht zu spät bin :wink:
Liebe Grüße, Miriam

ps: hm, beim ersten mal is meine antwort nich übergekomm - vllt. diesmal? Lg, =)

Vielen lieben Dank, so kann ich den also abschicken meint ihr?

geh zu google da gibts dieses sprachtool :slight_smile: