Students Letter

Hi,

wäre cool wenn ihr mal über meinen Brief drüber schauen könntet. :grinning:
Was soll ich ganz am ende schreiben: love …, best wishes…, yours sincerely…??

Jetzt schon mal Danke für konstruktive Kritik :+1:

liebe Grüße Tamara

Dear Host Family,

first of all, thank you for reading my letter and spending time on getting to know me better. I hope it will give you an impression about me, my life here in Germany and why I would like to spend a year in the USA.

I went to the USA twice yet. Once to California and the second time to Florida, but these trips were just holidays. But now I would like to stay in the US for a bit longer. Prooving my english is of course one of the reasons but not the only one; I’d really like to see the differet cultutre, different habits and lifestyle, different views of things, maybe visit the Grand Canyon,…

But now a bit about me:

In general I am quite open to new things, but sometimes a little bit shy in unknown situations.
Sport is quite important to me. I do gymnastics since I was a littel girl and I also always did a second sport, horse vaulting, riding, I started snowboarding this winter and it is quite fun, and right now I swim, but i think about stopping that and starting tennis. I also love reading, watching good films, listening to music, relaxing in the sun, humor, cooking…I am also quite interessted in architecture.
I also travel a lot, Italy, France, Egypt, Croatia, Spain, USA, and I spend at least once a year my hollidays in Swizzerland.

I’m living in a small village near the lake XXXX in the very south of Germany. My school is in a town which is 3 km far from where I live, and from there you have the best view all ofer the lake, and if it’s summer you even can go swimming in lunchbreaks. My favourite subjects in school are chemistry, history, english and social studies.
After my final exams I would like to become a lawyer.

My best friend is Kathi, we understood eachother quite well because we are just at the same wavelength. I speak very often englisch with her because she lived in the USA for 5 years and of course now she speaks it fluently.

I also have got to older siblings, XXXXX and XXXXX, they are both sudying now, but I am happy about having them, because there was a lot i was able to learn from them. If I had problems in school I can ask my sister, or with my computer I can ask my brother. Of course sometimes they made jokes about me, but this made me beeing self-confident, and not taking everythig to serious. My childhood was funnier with than it have been without them; my brother loves kidding and beeing ironical.
At home I have to clean my room, the bathroom and sometimes I bake or cook.

I like animals, I rode and I also have got a cat, Lilly, which I really love.

I’m looking forward to her from you,

Tamara XXXXXX

Hey,
der Text klingt echt gut, aber du hast hier und da ein paar Fehler, ich hoffe es ist okay, dass ich die korrigiert habe und ich hab sie dann groß geschrieben.

Dear Host Family,

first of all, thank you for reading my letter and spending time on getting to know me better. I hope it will give you an impression about me, my life here in Germany and why I would like to spend a year in the USA.

I went to the USA twice yet. Once to California and the second time to Florida, but these trips were just holidays. But now I would like to stay in the US for a bit longer. Prooving my english is of course one of the reasons but not the only one; I’d really like to see the differet cultutre, different habits and lifestyle, different views of things, maybe visit the Grand Canyon,…

But now a bit about me:

In general I am quite open to new things, but sometimes a little bit shy in unknown situations.
Sport is quite important to me. I do gymnastics since I was a LITTLE girl and I also always did a second sport, horse vaulting, HORSEBACK RIDING, I started snowboarding this winter and it is quite fun, and right now I swim, but i think about stopping that and starting tennis. I also love reading, watching good films, listening to music, relaxing in the sun, humor, cooking…I am also quite interessted in architecture.
I also travel a lot, Italy, France, Egypt, Croatia, Spain, USA, and I spend at least once a year my HOLIDAYS in SWIZERLAND.

I’m living in a small village near the lake XXXX in the very south of Germany. My school is in a town which is 3 km far from where I live, and from there you have the best view all OVER the lake, and if it’s summer you even can go swimming in THE lunchbreaks. My favourite subjects in school are chemistry, history, english and social studies.
After my final exams I would like to become a lawyer.

My best friend is Kathi, we UNDERSTAND each other quite well because we are just at the same wavelength. I speak very often ENGLISH with her because she lived in the USA for 5 years and of course she speaks it fluently NOW.

I also have to older siblings, XXXXX and XXXXX, they are both GOING TO UNIVERSITY now, but I am happy about having them, because there was a lot I was able to learn from them. If I HAVE problems in school I can ask my sister, or with my computer I can ask my brother. Of course sometimes they MAKE jokes about me, but this made me beeing self-confident, and not taking EVERTHING TOO serious. My childhood was funnier with THEM than it have been without them; my brother loves kidding and beeing ironical.
At home I have to clean my room, the bathroom and sometimes I bake or cook.

I like animals, I AM HORSEBACK RIDING and I also have a cat, Lilly, which I really love.

Am Ende würde ich Lots of Love benutzen, musst du aber nicht.
Ich ahb auch mal eine ganze Zeit lang gedacht reiten heißt „riding“, aber es heißt „horseback riding“ und studying bedeutet einfach nur lernen und nicht studieren, deshalb ahb ich da jetzt „going to university“ hingeschrieben.

Viele Grüße Emilia

Danke fürs korrigiern :grinning:,
hier der überarbeitete brief

Dear Host Family,

first of all, thank you for reading my letter and spending time on getting to know me better. I hope the following lines will give you an impression about me, my life here in Germany and why I would like to spend 6 months in the USA.

I went to the USA twice yet. Once to California and the second time to Florida, but these trips were just holidays. But now I would like to stay in the US for a bit longer. Improving my english is of course one of the reasons but not the only one; I’d really like to see the different culture, different habits and lifestyle, different views of things, maybe visit the Grand Canyon,…

But now a bit about me:

In general I am quite open to new things, but sometimes a little bit shy in unknown situations.
Sport is quite important to me. I do gymnastics since I was a little girl and I also always did a second sport, horse vaulting, horseback riding, I started snowboarding this winter and it is quite fun, and right now I swim, but i think about stopping that and starting tennis. I also love reading, watching good films, listening to music, relaxing in the sun, humor, cooking…I am also quite interested in architecture. I like to travel a lot and I spend at least once a year my holidays in Switzerland.

I’m living in a small village near the Lake XXXX in the very south of Germany. My school is in a town which is 3 km far from home, and from there you have the best view all over the lake, and if it’s summer you even can go swimming in lunchbreaks. My favourite subjects in school are chemistry, history, english and social studies.
After my final exams I would like to become a lawyer.

My best friend is Kathi, we understand each other quite well because we are just at the same wavelength. I speak very often english with her because she lived in the USA for 5 years and of course she speaks it fluently now.

I also have got to older siblings, XXXX and XXXXX, they are both going to university now, but I am happy to have them, because there was a lot I was able to learn from them. If I have problems in school I can ask my sister, or with my computer I can ask my brother. Of course, sometimes they made jokes about me, but this made me more self-confident, and not taking everything too serious. My childhood was funnier with them, than it would have been without them; my brother loves kidding and being ironical.
At home I have to clean my room, the bathroom and sometimes I bake or cook.

I like animals and we have got a cat, Lilly, which I really love.

I’m looking forward to hear from you and Lots of Love,

Tamara XXXX:+1::+1::+1::+1::+1::+1:

Hallo Tamara,

in dem überarbeiteten Brief waren noch einige Fehler, darum habe ich nochmal kurz über den korrigierten Brief drüber geschaut und noch einiges korrigiert, was mir noch aufgefallen ist. Sicher sind noch immer kleine Fehler dabei, aber man muss ja auch keinen grammatikalisch perfekten und stilistisch hochwertigen Brief abliefern!

Dear host family,

first of all, thank you for reading my letter and spending some time on getting to know me better. I hope the following lines will give you an impression of me and my life in Germany and of my my reasons to spend six months in the USA.

So far I have travelled the USA twice and have been to California and Florida. Now I would like to stay in the USA for a longer time. Improving my english is, of course, one of my reasons but it is not the only one; I’d really like to experience a different culture, get to know different habits and a different lifestyle and get a new view on life.

But now some facts about me: In general I am quite open to new situations but sometimes I`m a little bit shy in unknown situations.
Sport is quite important to me. I have been doing gymnastics since I was a little girl. Moreover I enjoy horse vaulting and horseback riding. I recently started snowboarding and enjoy it a lot. I also do swimming regularly but I think about stopping that and starting tennis. I also love reading, watching good films, listening to music, relaxing in the sun, humor, cooking… I am also interested in architecture. I also like to travel a lot and spend at least one holiday a year in Switzerland.

I live in a small village near Lake XXXX in the very south of Germany. I go to school in a town about three kilometres away from my home town. From there one has the best view onto the lake and in summer one can even go swimming during the lunchbreak. My favourite subjects at school are chemistry, history, English and social studies.
After finishing school I would like to become a lawyer.

My best friend is Kathi, we get along well because we are just at the same wavelength. I often talk to her in English because she spent five years in the USA and can speak English fluently.

I also have to older siblings, XXXX and XXXXX, who attend university. I am happy to have them because I could learn a lot from them. If I have problems at school I can talk to my sister, if I struggle with my computer I can ask my brother. Of course the sometimes they make jokes about me but this has made me more self-confident and has helped me not to take everything too serious. My childhood would not have been so funny without them; my brother loves kidding other people and being ironical.
At home I have to clean my room and the bathroom and sometimes I bake or cook.

I also like animals and love my pet, a cat called Lilly.

I’m looking forward to hearing from you!

Lots of love, Tamara

Vielleicht sind einige Korrekturen noch hilfreich.

Viele Grüße und schon mal viel Spaß in den USA,

Marie-Claire