ich bräuchte eure Hilfe. Ich versuche grad eine Selbstbeschreibung zu schreiben, weiß aber nicht ob ich auf dem richtigen Weg bin. Wenn ihr verbesserungsvorschläge habt: Immer her damit:grinning:
My name is Lisa and I’m 15 years old. I was born in Munich, a big city in southern Germany. I don’t have any siblings, but I have two budgies. Since my dad moved out, I live alone with my mum.
Sometimes it looks as if I’m a very quiet person but actually I’m friendly and open to everybody. I don’t have problems to get to know new people. I am part of an organization group at my school. It’s called the SMV which means ‚students with responsibility‘. It’s a group of students who organizes parties, Christmas bazaars and things like that. We also represent the whole school at the teachers council.
I love to read books. If I like the German version of a book, I read the original version, too. I also like to take pictures. It’s a big part of my life. When I meet up with my friends, we cook or bake things, talk about everything or go shopping.
I started learning English in the Kindergarten. It was just for fun, but I think it really connected me to this language. I’m better in the oral exams than in the written ones. I love speaking English.
Hey Lisa,
an sich finde ich es ziemlich gut. Es ist gut und interresant geschrieben :). Was du vielleicht noch anders machen könntest:
-Du solltest noch schreiben wieso du das AJ machen willst
-Ich würde noch schreiben, WAS du an Englisch so toll findest (wie es sich anhört/ dass es die Menschen auf der Welt verbindet/ …)
-Ich würde noch etwas mehr zu deinen Hobbies schreiben, z.B. an der Stelle, dass du gerne Bilder machst. Erkläre doch, wieso es dir so viel Spaß macht =)-
Danke für deine Hilfe ich habe jetzt noch etwas geändert und dazu getan
(…)
I also like to take pictures. It’s a big part of my life. I love taking pictures of little details, like the seeds in a pine cone, the bark of a tree or even the structure of clothes. When I meet up with my friends, we cook or bake things, talk about everything or go shopping.
I started learning English in the Kindergarten. It was just for fun, but I think it really connected me to this language. I’m better in the oral exams than in the written ones. I love speaking English. I think English really connects people. Nearly everybody understands it partly. You can speak it worldwide and there will always be someone who understands you.
I want to go to England because I want to improve my English and my social competences and I want to get to know the English culture.
ich habe jetzt noch etwas geändert und dazu getan 
!